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You will be that never forgotten kiss,
the one that set my lips on fire without a word,
that trembling, desperate touch,
that tore out my soul and left it naked.
I will always remember you in every dawn,
in the shining of the stars that caress the night,
because even if our paths sometimes separate,
your essence in my memory, never to be reproached.
You are fire that dances, shadow in my heart,
piece of eternity in a fleeting instant,
and although destiny plays with every illusion,
you will remain in my verses, a daring sigh.
you will be that kiss, my eternal truth,
the echo of a love that cannot be extinguished,
the deep beat that finds me again.
You use vibrant imagery, especially with phrases like "set my lips on fire" and "fire that dances, shadow in my heart." These metaphors vividly convey the intensity of the emotions you wish to express. I felt the kiss could have been expanded on to add even more depth to the feelings. Overall though the poem does a great job of capturing the bittersweet nature of remembering a past love.
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